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Post by crono as glenn on Aug 14, 2006 10:58:32 GMT -5
ok but just join
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Post by Cyrus Knight on Aug 14, 2006 21:08:27 GMT -5
alright
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Post by crono as glenn on Aug 15, 2006 20:07:02 GMT -5
so when is ch 3 new comming (your still not there)
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Post by Cyrus Knight on Aug 15, 2006 21:12:45 GMT -5
I'm not sure right now, I really messed up on chap. 3 so I am rewritting the entire thing then I still got to send it to my editor and have it revised. So probably in about 2-3 weeks depending on how long it takes for my editor to revise it.
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Post by crono as glenn on Aug 15, 2006 21:14:57 GMT -5
yea your ch 3 will be very diffrent
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Post by Cyrus Knight on Aug 16, 2006 14:44:01 GMT -5
Yea espesially with the twist that I'm throwing in there, not to mention with everybody dieing, I can't have that. It would be way to hard for the reader to digest. All in one chapter too...
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Post by Cyrus Knight on Aug 16, 2006 20:55:57 GMT -5
This is how serious I'll be taking the novel from now on, there's a bit of news on here to, like I won't be releaseing Chapter Revised and Edited probably just the Demos but don't worry. I'll do the best I can on making sure there are no Grammacle mistakes or nothing that leaves u confused.
This is a chat with my editor...
CTmuzicman: hey, ****** as the traitor is a great Idea GaretJax93: you think so? CTmuzicman: oh yea, i've started it out like that CTmuzicman: there's one thing though CTmuzicman: I suck at old english! GaretJax93: yeah well if you can make it work all throughout the story then yeah go for it GaretJax93: did you ever read what i got finished in chapter 3, about how cyrus makes it back to shore after the ship blows up CTmuzicman: yea with carten and all GaretJax93: yeah, still going that direction? CTmuzicman: yea i finished that part GaretJax93: in any case, i think you have to finish your story and have the plot unfold the way you want it and then i can go back and just polish it up, because if i write and go with what comes to my mind, then we have two writers and that probably wont work too good GaretJax93: know what i'm saying? CTmuzicman: I completely agree GaretJax93: and i can add some fillers too, but the story is all you CTmuzicman: I can still come to you for advise right? GaretJax93: oh hell yeah anytime CTmuzicman: alright GaretJax93: advice about anything CTmuzicman: Well this is what I was getting too, Tychon and his ship come about the Cursed Woods to find Cyrus. Cyrus leaves from Cartens house and has a horrible trip finding any sign of Guardia and finally finds the ship. The crew was just onloading to findd Cyrus and set up camp but ****** had gone missing CTmuzicman: And from there I'm going to take it so that ****** is talking to slash saying knowbody was supposed to be hurt yadayadaydada CTmuzicman: and Slash and ****** fight CTmuzicman: so? CTmuzicman: Oh and Cyrus witnesses this GaretJax93: idk, i guess i'm having kinda hard time following GaretJax93: they're looking for cyrus - i get that GaretJax93: eventually cyrus gets up the strength to head out looking for everybody else - i get that too, but is it really hard for cyrus to find anybody? does he not know where he is? GaretJax93: the people are looking for cyrus...how do they know he isn't still out at sea, or drowned? how do they know to look onshore for him? GaretJax93: and how does ****** go missing? even if you don't tell the reader right away you have to explain it at some point CTmuzicman: so i should probably add a cutscene (like) when Tychon and the crew are astonished and look for him at sea? GaretJax93: and ****** tells slash that nobody was supposed to get hurt...when? when was nobody supposed to be hurt? is that even resasonable? CTmuzicman: ****** ends up at the cursed woods to find Slash GaretJax93: or you can explain it after cyrus eventually meets back up with them CTmuzicman: That's when he goes missing CTmuzicman: ok GaretJax93: so then is it such a big debacle that slash and ****** must then fight to the death CTmuzicman: They have a big arguement about what was really supposed to happen CTmuzicman: Which I will explain CTmuzicman: Oh and Cartens house is on a part of the Cursed Woods that Cyrus had never seen GaretJax93: ok GaretJax93: like mayb ewhere the cursed woods come right up to the edge of the ocean? CTmuzicman: yea CTmuzicman: other than all of that what else would there be? CTmuzicman: like question wise with the readers? GaretJax93: i think thats it CTmuzicman: alright good GaretJax93: tell you what, do you have all your updated writing online to download? CTmuzicman: yea CTmuzicman: y? GaretJax93: cuz i would like to read the whole thing start to finish and then i'll better know CTmuzicman: I'll finish up a little on chap. 3 (I doubt that I could finish the whole thing) but then I'll send that to you. do you want the other chapters? I spruced those up a bit too CTmuzicman: ? GaretJax93: yeah the whole thing CTmuzicman: alright, I have a football scrimmage against Rockford, Charlotte, and Grand Rapids Christian so after that I'll send that all to you tomarrow GaretJax93: ok, sometime i'd like to see one of your games, so let me know about that too CTmuzicman: can do, My first game is at Grandville next week on thursday CTmuzicman: Think u could make it? GaretJax93: well grandville is a long way, and i might be working, idk when, i got a new job today, so i really can't say, but i would definitely feel more confident about a game that was in lowell or someplace closeby like belding greenville saranac ionia, that kinda thing CTmuzicman: alright CTmuzicman: I'll tell u sometime CTmuzicman: well I'm gonna work on my novel CTmuzicman: I'll ttyl GaretJax93: ok later CTmuzicman: peace GaretJax93: gl
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Post by crono as glenn on Aug 17, 2006 14:49:38 GMT -5
ok
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Post by Kabob on Sept 19, 2006 21:04:26 GMT -5
good thing we have some news around here
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Post by Cyrus Knight on Oct 19, 2006 12:06:03 GMT -5
Finally with football season ending soon (Today as a matter of fact) our team had a fantastic season with a 7-1-1 record. So now I can finally have some time to mess around on the computer and write my Novel. SO expect me to be posting a lot of news upcoming.
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Post by crono as glenn on Nov 1, 2006 23:18:12 GMT -5
my fresh football team suacks only 1 win
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Post by crono as glenn on Nov 6, 2006 23:38:31 GMT -5
WTF ARE U CYRUS OMG COME PLZ OH WAIT RU SENIOR NOW? OH WELL IM FRESHMAN AND STILL HAVE TIME ON MY HANDS LOL
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Post by Cyrus Knight on Nov 9, 2006 14:07:06 GMT -5
Alright alright alright, I'll come more often and I'm a sophomore. It's just that the site seems a little boring so I'm going to change the template again pretty soon here and you'll probably see a lot of me...
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Post by crono as glenn on Nov 16, 2006 0:24:42 GMT -5
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Post by Cyrus Knight on Nov 16, 2006 9:16:24 GMT -5
Yes i know, I really need to get goin on it. I'm working on a new site, but yea I'll drop by Crisis
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